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"Hypnotized" by Bluelady (hypnosis/control) 7, 7, 7
"Hypnotized" by Bluelady (BlueLady16@aol.com). As I moved through this story-poem, I was struck by a problematic thought: if the woman wants to feel completely under the control of her lover, how is hypnosis related to this outcome? If she wanted to experience this feeling of control, it would seem that this could not possibly attain this goal by entering the trance that this poem describes. To pursue this issue further, I would have to tell you the ending; and I won't do that. The imagery in this poem is effective, but numerous grammatical errors (e.g., "your" for "you're") combined with the problem cited in the preceding paragraph to reduce my enjoyment of this story. Ratings for "Hypnotized" Athena (technical quality): 7 Venus (plot & character): 7 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 7 |