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"I Wonder" by Poison Ivan (prose poem) 10, 10, 10
"I Wonder" by Poison Ivan (poisoniv1@hotmail.com). I don't think my husband reads my reviews, but I'm going to find out pretty soon if I'm wrong. That's because I'm going to talk about him in this review. In this story the author describes the mental state of a man wondering how his lover will relate to him. I have never come very close to feeling this man's emotions myself, but apparently I have personally been the cause of almost an identical set of reactions within the mind and heart of my husband. His tensions were even more severe, as he told me later: apparently I rejected him {in his mind's eye} six or seven times after he dialed the sixth digit of my phone number when he was calling me for our first date. He got that far and hung up six times! I had no idea that he was so overcome with anxiety - although I really wasn't sure whether I had a date with him or not by the time he did reach me and our conversation ended. Our first phone conversation after that first date was even more inspiring. He lacked telephone skills. After we had talked for quite a while and he obviously couldn't find a way to end the conversation, I said, "We really should end this conversation soon. Sum things up." He replied, "Omigod, what is it?" Ya see, the nun who taught English and told me that the right way to end a telephone conversation was to summarize the key elements of the conversation hadn't realized that the potential sex partner might hear me saying, "Something's up!" He's done all right, though. Our relationship is kind of like an Uther Pendragon story with the roles reversed. And my husband was barely trying to get to first base! The guy in this story is rapidly approaching third base, ready to head for home plate. Oddly enough, the author uses the word "base," but not in reference to either a baseball sex metaphor or a penile location. However, he uses "diddle" about the way you'd expect. Actually, the guy in this story is more eager than anxious. This story is best described as a non-verse poem about a man's hopes and aspirations as he looks forward to his tryst with his lady love. It's excellent reading. Ratings for "I Wonder" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 |