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"Closing Up the Cottage" by Losgud (adult incest) 9.8, 8.5, 9.0
"Closing Up the Cottage" by Losgud (losgud@hotmail.com). Story Summary: Sister seduces brother This was a very intriguing story. Brother opens his big mouth and offers to help his little sister close up her cottage in the mountains. Wife conveniently goes on vacation with the kids the same day his parents send him plane tickets to Rita's cottage. He arrives at a rinky-dink airport only to find that the airline lost his bag. Sister shows up and drives him to her cottage. He takes a nap and wakes up to find Rita sitting on his groin. They get to work and he finds her consistently rubbing up against him and exposing herself all day. That night, he finds his only clean clothing a pair of borrowed silk panties and a long shirt. They go to bed on the pullout sofa. He wakes up with her lying all over him. He finally catches on when she begins massage certain body parts. The rest is predictable. A nicely written tale. Near technical perfection. A few quibbling errors. The style is adequate though not spectacular. Its pacing felt slightly rushed. A very readable story. I did have problems with the characterizations. Treating this story merely as stroke fiction, they are more than adequate. However, the tale seems to be wanting more. The suspense of exactly why she is trying to seduce him is never made very clear. The narrator comes off rather thick. Even after she has started giving him a handjob, he still doesn't seem to get it. His motivation is also barely tenable. Yes, she has been giving him an erection all day, but the incestial taboos that he had been using to keep himself calm disappear without even a fleeting mention. Sprinkling a bit more of this conflict would have allowed excitement build to the climax. Instead it sags somewhat. This story reached its climax and resolution a little too easily. Overall, a good, hot story. Not perfect, but definitely one worth considering. The seduction is believable even if the climax is somewhat weak. Ratings for "Closing Up the Cottage" Technical: 9.8 A few quibbling mistakes. Style felt slightly rushed Characterization and Plot: 8.5 Characters needed more fleshing out Appeal: 9.0 Sex was great but storyline was lacking somewhat |