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* "Fun With June" by Bigtunaman (oral sex) 8, 7, 8
* "Fun With June" by Bigtunaman (bigtunaman@hotmail.com). Guest review by BluePencil. Authors strive for a good opening. Properly written, an opening line sets the tone for the entire story. "Four score and Seven -", "It was the best of times -", "It was a dark and stormy night" - each phrase leads, seemingly inevitably, into the writing that follows. So when you encounter a story that starts out "Did you ever meet a woman who has 'blowjob' written all over her face?" you don't expect a gentle romance. I must congratulate Bigtunaman; his opening line accurately reflects the mood and tone of the story as a whole. No fumbling teenagers, no romantic hesitations - just a pair of raunchy adults who enjoy a purely physical relationship. June and the narrator meet, have sex, and commence an on-and-off physical relationship, seasoned with camaraderie and friendship but not a hint of romance. Of it's kind, it's a good story. The writing is competent and matches the story; the characterization, though minimal, is effective. It reminds me of _My Friends the Allens_ without the romance and plot, or one of Mike Hunt's stories without the humor. This story would be at home in the Letters column of a men's magazine; indeed, except for its greater length, it would be perfect match. What can I say? I liked it more than I expected to. There are many writers on the net who attempt deeper characterization, plotting, and prose. Very few do a better job of hitting the target they aimed for. And though I might not look very hard, I'll likely read anything else of Bigtunaman's I come across. Ratings for "Fun With June" Athena (technical quality): 8 Venus (plot and character): 7 BluePencil (appeal to reviewer): 8 |