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"Miscommunication" by Yarblack {dynamic
slut wife sex} 8, 10, 10
"Miscommunication" by Yarblack (yarblack@aol.com). {Link: See TOC.} Guest review by Sandman (sandman@bitsmart.com) Ok, you're a thirty-forty something and one day you discover that you're a world-class workaholic when your wife asks you if you're having an affair. You discover to your surprise you are, but the affair is your job. When that happens, it's time to start putting a little work into your marriage. You do this by dating your wife all over again, sharing fantasies, and having adventurous sex. Slowly she becomes that slut wife every male dreams of having. Well in this case the high-priced call-girl every male dreams of having for a wife. Seriously, think about it. She starts feeling better about herself because other men are interested in her (not to mention the sex-life has picked up between you two). You start seeing her as an object worthy of desire because other men see her as an object of desire. Hardly anyone stoops down to pick up a penny these days, but what if it was a rare penny? What if other people wanted that penny? See what I mean? Well, it sounded sensible while I was reading it. The first part of this story could be titled "how to put passion back in your marriage." The first part of this story was also a virtual cornucopia of summarized erotica plots that had me thinking, "if this author had fleshed all this out this could be the slut wife version of Mark Aster's Allen sisters." Which is to say, the author could have serialized this story almost forever without the readers getting bored of the main characters. The latter part of the story of course moves into the traditional gang-bang the wife through a "miscommunication" that I won't give away. And yes the sex was hot. I found the scene shortly after the first bar-room flirt to be extraordinarily hot, if only because the anticipation and mystery was so thick. In the gang-bang finale there is one small cliche where the wife discovers a black man with a ten inch cock. No doubt there really are black men out there with ten inch cocks and I suppose it's quite possible that such a man would be in the right place at the right time to be included in this story. In a previous slut wife story review, I said such stories are about power. This story, however did not exactly fit into that mold. That's not to say slut wife fans will be disappointed, far from it. But there's no power-trip here, only two interesting people whose fantasy lives have crossed over into their real lives. As Celeste's vicarious thrills go, this was one hell of an enjoyable ride. There were a few problems with the story, all of them in Athena. This story could use a good proof. Aside from the occasional misused word and rough sentences, there are no blank lines between the paragraphs (again space is not a valuable commodity to be hoarded!). But most serious of all, there's a formatting glitch that causes the story to read like this paragraph. Those are the problems. I suggest you ignore them because the plot and characters are rock solid and I think you'll find the appeal to be worthwhile even if you normally don't go in for slut wife or badly formatted stories :-) Ratings for "Miscommunication" Athena (technical quality): 8 -- Hard to read but worth it. Venus (plot & character): 10 Sandman (appeal to reviewer): 10 |