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"Would You" by LadyBear (poem) 8, 5, 5
"Would You" by LadyBear (ladybear77@hotmail.com). If I review one poem, I might as well review another. I don't mean to belittle the efforts of this poet - and this poem might subjectively be meaningful and significant to a particular person. However, the main problem with it is that while it is intended to express intense emotions, it comes across extremely flat. There's nothing ear-catching about the language - it has no special rhyme or rhythm or catchy sound. The imagery is not especially vivid. If this author wants to write effective poetry, she should take her idea (which is a very good one) and incorporate the major elements of effective poetry - verbal imagery and interesting combinations of words to convey ideas and emotions. I hope both this author and others who read this take this as constructive advice. Reactions to poetry are highly subjective; but there is a clear difference between this poem and the one reviewed immediately before it. Try to learn from the comparison. Or just enjoy the poetry. Ratings for "Would You" Athena (technical quality): 8 Venus (plot & character): 5 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 5 |