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"In Control" by Bluelady (intense poem) 10, 10, 10
"In Control" by Bluelady (bluelady16@aol.com). Most people think that a poem is something that rhymes. Actually, a poem is mode of expression in which the author uses verbal imagery and interesting combinations of words to convey ideas and emotions. Unless the author is writing epic poetry, the emphasis is usually on the emotion. I think I reached a new level of maturity in my adolescent understanding of poetry when I realized that Walt Whitman's poems in "Leaves of Grass" were better examples of poetic expression than the scrawls on bathroom walls that began with, "Here I sit/ All broken hearted/...." - even though the latter rhymed and the former did not. Bluelady does a wonderful job in this and other poems of conveying the intensity of emotion. In this case, she describes a woman who is "In Control" during a lovemaking session. My one suggestion would be to change the word "plead" to something else. People in control don't plead. I might add at this point that I would have advised John Milton to omit the line about "viewing the dismal situation" from his magnum opus. Had he followed my advice, he would be famous today. Ratings for "In Control" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 |