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"Up on the Roof" by Sventek (sex on rooftop) 9, 9, 9
"Up on the Roof" by Sventek (sventek@jps.net). This is the first story I have reviewed by this author, and it is a very good one. It graphically describes a man and a woman making love on the rooftop of a large city. You have to assume that this is an apartment building - I mention this because readers from rural areas (especially Amish readers) will have trouble imagining effective lovemaking on slanted rooftops. To apartment dwellers, sex on the rooftop is the moral equivalent of a roll in the hay. I reviewed another story with this same title a couple of years ago. I'll repost the review, and maybe the author will repost the story. A minor problem with the present story was the occasional slightly inappropriate choice of words and images. For example, when a guy is caressing a girl who is braced against the little wall that surrounds the rooftop, it is really best not to refer to her orgasm as "sending her over the edge." In addition, I like chocolate and I like fine wine; but I prefer to savor my husband's body with the image of one or the other, not both in the same gulp. Finally, can a "steel erection" go into a woman's mouth and feel like a "ripe fruit"? These are not fatal errors. Indeed, they may be just a matter of preference; and they distracted me only slightly. Overall, this was a very good story. Ratings for "Up on the Roof" Athena (technical quality): 9 Venus (plot & character): 9 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9 |