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* "Sally's Surrender" by Kid Dynamite (bdsm & humiliation)
10, 10, 10
* "Sally's Surrender" by Kid Dynamite (an109288@anon.penet.fi). One might expect something silly and immature from an author using the name "Kid Dynamite." Not so. This is a cleverly constructed, complex story that comes across very clearly. As the author points out in the prologue, not many real human beings don't and shouldn't act this way. It would be a horrible world if they did. The author uses a highly effective technique of switching viewpoints among several protagonists as he tells his tale: Sally, her mother, her stepfather, the woman from the Society, her husband, the dirty old man who teaches art at the Academy, and others. With each change of perspective we see the story unfolding as that person alone would have seen it. At times the action becomes very slow-paced. I read page after page of the art teacher trying to get a look at the top of Sally's panties and practically shooting his load when he got there. But art teachers are often like that, I suppose. The basic story line is that Sally is an extremely attractive and naive 18-year-old who has been home-schooled and taught to give automatic respect to authority by draconian and puritanical parents. Well, not too puritanical; they're heavily into bdsm and into swinging. In fact, they have applied to join the Society of Silk, a bizarre but selective group of swingers and sado- masochists whose tentacles reach deep into the Academy, where Sally is blossoming into a grownup woman. Surprisingly enough, the Dean of the Academy is also the Mistress of the Society! This is a coincidence. Really. So as we near the midpoint of the story, we have young, innocent Sally, sitting in the office of the Dean of the Academy, accused by a teacher of wearing no underpants to school that day - an act in which she has engaged to please her art teacher, who is a benign but disgusting pervert who would probably die to sniff her used tampons - about to be judged by the Mistress of a secret Society of depraved sex offenders to which her own parents belong. It is at this point that the author points out that she's lucky she doesn't have serious problems, like drugs or booze. Right! Sally's problems get much worse; but I'll let you read the story to find out about that. The one thing I would do (besides writing a completely different story) would be to vary the style within the segments that take the perspective of each separate protagonist. As it is, the author uses a very simple style that suits Sally but is not really appropriate for all the others. The ideas are appropriate, but the way they are expressed is not. In his prologue the author states that he thinks this story is a vast improvement over his previous venture, "Lessons in Lust." He's right about that! This is an excellent example of the misguided asshole genre of literature, which Edgar Alan Poe exemplified so well in his "Telltale Heart." People really enjoy trying to figure out what goes on inside the mind of bizarre people. Again, as the author points out in the prologue, not many real human beings don't and shouldn't act this way. It would be a horrible world if they did. In a way this was an uplifting story. It made me happy to live in a world of murderers, rapists, politicians, and lawyers. Ratings for "Sally's Surrender" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 -- |