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"Baby" by EzRiter
"Baby" by EzRiter (posted by Don Ellis (rkhaan@ix.netcom.com). Sam and Mandy Johnson started out as many of us would like to. They fell in love at an early age and set about the task of starting a family. All sweet and innocent - until a trip to Vegas where Sam caught the gambling bug, quickly finding himself $20,000 in the hole and in deep shit with his bookie, a very large and very dangerous Black man, David Winston White, affectionately known as "Baby." There were a lot of things I liked about this story, like Baby's interesting way of collecting on Sam's gambling debts. Most of all, I loved the way Mandy defended her daughters, standing up to the imposing Black bookie as any mother would to protect them from Sam's downfall and Baby's rather interesting collection techniques. However, from this point on, the events take on a rather astonishing change as Mandy willingly gives herself to Baby, forcing Sam to watch as she gets bitten by some stereotypically serious Black snake. And, if Sam's humiliation wasn't complete, Baby asks Mandy to have his baby, to which she readily agrees. While reading this author's work, I found it a little corny at first - who ever heard of a polite gangster? However, as I continue to follow Sam's predicament, I could understand why Mandy agreed to whore herself to Baby. Nothing hurts a man more to only lose his wife to another man and know she's going to have his baby; but to lose his existing children to the guy as well? When you tack on Sam getting relegated to second string in his own bed and the fact that all of this is happening right in his face and you have some pretty humiliating shit going on here. If I wanted to get even with my wife for losing everything we owned, this is how I'd do it. As it turned out, Mandy not only had Baby's child, but in the end sort of took Baby as a second husband. Sam finally got his act together, got rid of his gambling habit, and the whole lot of them went on to live as happily as any could under these conditions. The sexual descriptions in the story were tastefully done and, overall, it was fairly well written. This story brings home a strong moral point: If you have a gambling problem, call 1-800-GAMBLER and get it under control. Or Baby might come to visit one day. Ratings for "Baby" R'khaan (technical quality): 7 R'khaan (plot & character): 7 R'khaan (appeal to reviewer):7 |