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"Melody" by Crimson Dragon (sex in the business world).
"Melody" by Crimson Dragon (dcrimson@yahoo.com). Guest review by Bookman. Crimson leads off her introduction to this piece by calling it a "strange story that defied classification." She's (? - yes, I know I'm making an assumption there, but there's a feminine aspect to the telling that's hard to argue with) right. Terri, the narrator, and Melody were competitors for the same high-level corporate job. Melody won. Terri doesn't hold a grudge, but is curious about this mystery woman who refuses to follow the unwritten rules. Then, after a drunken company Christmas party, Terri receives a painful cry for help. It's Melody. . . If you define a sex story as 'hump, pump, bump, and scream', then this short tale isn't a sex story. Virtually all physicality happens off stage. But it is a story with sex at its core; sex as motivator, driver, and destroyer. (Actually, it's less a story than a part of one; it would make a good segment to an hour TV drama, but it's a little rickety standing alone. But that's another soapbox.) Melody's revelations to Terri set the stage for an uncomfortable, unrealized denouement. You're left knowing that this episode in these women's lives is not over, just over for now. I can't rate the story as a complete success, but it is an excellent well- outlined beginning. Some stories leave you satisfied, this one leaves you wanting more. Not entirely a bad way to go. Athena (technical): 9 (a few small errors, nothing that will get in the reader's way) Aphrodite (general sensual appeal): 3 Apollo (appeal to reviewer): 7 |