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"Two Families" by D. Abbey (prolonged orgy) 8, 7, 6
"Two Families" (D. Abbey - dabby@access.mountain.net). Guest review by BillyG (hayden@mindless.com). "Two Families," as the title suggests, is a story about the families of Alice Stadler, a divorced young mother of three, and her next door neighbor, John Smiley, a widower who similarly has three children. There's a fortuitous similarity in the family compositions, for Alice's children include twelve- year-old Sally and her older brothers, thirteen-year-old twins Alex and Andrew, while John's family consists of twelve-year-old David and his older sisters, thirteen-year-old twins, June and Jane. There's a method in my listing the line up of players, for they all come to have a role; and in the first few chapters it's difficult to tell who's who. Since all the girls are hot for all the guys and vice versa, several times I lost track of just who was panting after whom. The plot is simplicity itself, little more than a series of contrivances that allow various couplings to occur. If your concept of consent permits a friendly, albeit horny twelve-year-old to have so-called consensual sex with an adult neighbor, then this is clearly a consensual story. There's no coercion or cajoling, much less threatening or blackmail that serves to coerce anyone in this story. They're all mutually randy and ready to play. If anything, the kids play a more active role in the light-hearted seductions that are heavily sprinkled throughout this moderately long story. The story is lusty and embraces the full gamut of vaginal, anal and oral sex, spiced with voyeurism and exhibitionism together with brief hints of same-sex attraction, There's little that is 'way out' in this story and even the incestuous pairings come across with little added charge. In fact, the number of players serves to lessen the intimacy. I found a predictable sameness that bordered on near monotony. In fact, some of the dialog was repeated almost word for word with different players. An attempt at symmetrical balance in the story came across like Pete Segar's "Little Boxes." The repetitious formulaic approach robbed the story of spontaneity and surprise. The new vignettes weren't new at all, but came across as a "same song, second verse." All in all, this was a almost sweet story, but marred by its own blandness and predictability. The lesson here is that less is more. Fewer players might have provided the setting for greater intensity and intimacy. This is an OK story, but it just didn't grab me. Ratings for "Two Families" Athena (technical quality): 8 (Formatting problems with a hard return and space after ever line) Venus (plot & character): 7 (Too thin and too many players) BillyG (appeal to reviewer): 6 (Less would be more) |