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"Becky Cried" by Poison Ivan (voyeurism and romance) 10, 10, 10
"Becky Cried" by Poison Ivan (poisoniv1@hotmail.com). It's a gray and overcast day, but we don't learn that till near the end of the story; nor does it matter, at least not until they make love in the rain in his backyard after they watch the other couple doing foreplay in the restaurant where Margot with the nice ass and happy fingers works. The first we hear about Becky's eponymous lacrimations is when she weeps when she discovers that she's not pregnant. However, lately she has been sitting on the couch in her bathrobe reading women's magazines and casting accusatory glances. And now Margot the waitress is beginning to look better and better to our narrator, and it's not even closing time at the watering hole. When Becky arrives for lunch, our narrator is enraptured with the sight of the couple at the next table, who are eating and flirting most outrageously. "Someone should turn a hose on them," Becky whispers. Or get a room, as my daughter would say. The other woman isn't wearing panties, and they leave shortly. "I have to go to the bathroom," Becky says. "Is everything okay?" Margot the waitress asks. Becky returns from the bathroom with items of wearing apparel in her purse. Becky and our narrator dance, and Becky says, "Don't get fresh, buster!" "Next time you say you're going to show somebody my butt, you'd better show somebody my butt!" says Becky. "I must say, there hasn't been much in the way of business, but it sure has been a fun day!" Margot says. Mood swings can be interesting. Ratings for "Becky Cried" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 |