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"Every Man's Fantasy" By Hangten (Spanish fly sex)
10, 10, 10
"Every Man's Fantasy" By Hangten (an19164@anon.nymserver.com). Guest review by Sandman (sandman@bitsmart.com) As near as I can tell, this is a story that Fred is transcribing as told by Willy who heard it from Rob. Apparently every man's fantasy is to have a nice little miracle pill called "Sex" that makes women so horny they'll throw themselves on anything. And when a guy takes "Sex" you ask? Well let's just say that Viagra's got nothing on "Sex". Now that's not exactly my fantasy, but as a sex story plot I guess it works out OK. Since we're talking aphrodisiacs here I once heard a story where in a small border town you could actually get Spanish fly that works! Amazingly enough though, the miracle drug worked only in a certain bar and the price per pill was remarkably similar to the going rate for hookers. Go figure. OK; Rob creates this miracle drug called "Sex" and his first victim, er research assistant, is a bookish type who deflowers our hero so thoroughly that he's limping days later. The next time he lowers the dosage and nabs a grade-A cock-teaser who's suddenly not so interested in teasing cocks any more, but in stuffing Rob's unusually large meat in places she ordinarily doesn't allow men to go! Next there's a little setback when one of his victims, er research assistants, wanders off to the restroom and gives a whole new meaning to the word pit-stop for all the guys in the bar. And so the endless litany of escapades continues. This is good stroke fiction. If you're looking for a cock teaser this is definitely it. The thing is, it struck me that it could have been just a little more than that. Rob is a geek's geek, but I saw the potential for some really interesting growth in the character, but every time that starts to happen he drops his wonder-pill into the mix and we're right back to some well-described but endlessly pointless sex. If anything, Rob's character turns into a porno sleaze. As stroke fiction goes, this story shines heads and tales above anything you're likely to find out there. But the size of the story worked at cross purposes with the objective of a review. This story was meant for a chapter to be read, the reader gets off and maybe the next day the reader comes back and read another chapter -- read, stroke, rest, repeat. As a reviewer I had to work through the sex to sort out things like grammar, plot and character. After the first few chapters I just began to skim the sex trying to see where this eleven chapter monster was taking me. It didn't take me very far. And so I end up with a dilemma on my hands. Here is a story that's absolutely perfect for the male audience members in alt.sex.stories. There's little character development, no real plot to speak of, but has tons of well described sex with a wide assortment of drug created bimbos. But there are also quite a few stories out there that manage to include sex just as hot but also stroke the mind with interesting characters and good plots. It may be unfair to rank this story in the same neighborhood as "Becky Cried", "Cannon Song", or any of the other absolutely stellar stories have been published to this group. But there were no major technical glitches, and the Celestial FAQ says plot and character can indeed be subservient to sex in a sex story. As for the personal appeal, well drug-induced bimbos may not be my gig; but sooner or latter this story's gonna describe a situation that will get your blood pumping. I'll leave the decisions of greatness to the top 20, but for uncomplicated stroke fiction this is a very good place to start if you're a guy and you don't mind a goofy look on the gal's face right before she starts ripping off your pants… Ratings for "Every Man's Fantasy" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 10 Sandman (appeal to reviewer): 10 |