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* "The Birthday Party" by Losgud (romantic birthday weekend)
8, 8, 9
* "The Birthday Party" by Losgud (lushgod@hotmail.com). Guest Review by DG. I reviewed a story by losgud a while back, and while I liked the story, I complained about the jumpy, stream-of-consciousness style, which I found a little distracting. In this story, the author has reduced the aimless rambling and concentrated on the narrative, and the result is, in my opinion, a better story. The narrator and his wife have birthdays a week apart, and he is trying to arrange a romantic birthday weekend alone without the kids. But his sister seems determined to ruin his plans. First she refuses to look after the kids. Then, when he finally gets everything arranged, she comes over to visit with his wife and refuses to leave. I don't think any longtime a.s.s. readers will be astonished to find out what happens next, but suffice it to say that the weekend lives up to expectations after all. Losgud has a flippant, casual narrative style that I enjoy, and I found the sex in this story to be quite arousing. There's nothing spectacular about this story, but it's a good, sexy read. As a side note, losgud mentions that this may be his last story, because he feels he is wasting his time and isn't getting much feedback. Although I feel as an a.s.s. author that the writing has to be its own reward, there is something very uplifting about receiving email from people who enjoyed your stories, and if losgud isn't getting any (pun intended) I can see why he would get discouraged. Ratings for "The Birthday Party" Athena (technical quality): 8 Venus (plot & character): 8 DG (appeal to reviewer): 9 |