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"Amy Swallows" by Walker (oral sex) 7, 7, 7
"Amy Swallows" by Walker. Posted by Kristen78 (Kristen78@aol.com) Guest reviewed by Poison Ivan. Walker's high school girlfriend Jamie fucks, sucks, and does anal. But there is one thing Jamie absolutely refuses to do: she _never_ swallows. When I was in high school, refusing to swallow was not a problem we dwelled on much. But I suppose times change. Fortunately for Walker, Amy is available as a soft shoulder to cry on. They have a telephone relationship, and it eventually comes out that Amy has no hang-ups about gulping goo. A little flirty back and forth, a few starts and stops, and eventually Amy and Walker end up on the roof. Walker gets the blow of his life. This story could have been a very good one. Where did Walker's sexual expectations come from? Why did he feel compelled to cheat on his girlfriend? Was it really just the swallowing? I got a hint of guilt feelings, but just barely a hint. And his telephone relationship with Amy felt unreal to me. I give the author a lot of credit for setting up something that could have been great. I just wish he had followed through better. The spelling and grammar were not great, but the sex on the rooftop was reasonably well described. But ultimately, this story left me feeling a little cold. Ratings for "Amy Swallows" Athena (technical quality): 7 Venus (plot & character): 7 Ivan (appeal to reviewer): 7 |