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"My Sexual Odyssey" by darla (sexual escapades) 9, 7, 6
"My Sexual Odyssey" by darla. Guest review by Nick (e-mail: Nick@cassandra.demon.co.uk). This is a little difficult to review because it is to be continued. So many stories stand or fall by the ending (or "denouement") - particularly short ones. So I have to assume that there is no ending and that this may run and run. "First, let me describe myself. I'm 5' 5" tall, 110 lbs, blonde and 36DD-26-35." This is not generally a promising start. A story is about describing events, not images. Readers are perfectly capable of drawing their own favorite images; and if they happen not to like the image that the writer describes, then the author has lost them to the rest of the story. I, for example, am not turned on by 36DD breasts (it does turn out that these are implants, but I don't like those either). The first part of the story is spent drawing up a sexual profile of the subject and her menfolk, which is quite interesting; but I couldn't quite get the "Barbie and Ken" image out of my head. These characters have only one dimension and are rather plastic. The rest of the story chronicles various sexual exploits which have contributed to her sexual development. Again quite interesting, but there appears to be no central theme - nothing to pull this together. Now, just keeping my eye on the ball, here, this *is* a sex story posted to titillate the reader, which it does reasonably well. So what if it doesn't have much conventional literary appeal? Many people who will read this will find this a thoroughly enjoyable piece. It is well enough written and there were some definite buzzes in it. My own marking system would give it 7 for technique, 4 for plot and character (again, without an ending I can't really give it much more) and 6 for personal appeal. Normalising for Celeste the ratings are: Athena (Technical) 9 Venus (Plot & character) 7 Nick (Appeal to Reviewer) 6 |