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"Diary" by Bruce AKA mcbeam (mind control & breast gtowth)
8, 8, 8
"Diary" by Bruce AKA mcbeam (Bmauger317@aol.com) The author describes this as an experimental attempt to tell a tale with no dialogue. There is indeed none. The narrator is some sort of clinician who takes women under his control and makes their breasts grow extremely large. I think mind control authors have the odds stacked against them. They have to make sexual activities sound interesting without any free will or seduction, and those elements are what make sex most enjoyable for most of us. The author tries to put some seduction into the story, and is fairly successful in this effort. However, the awkward grammar and extremely objective style sometimes become tedious. This is a decent but not great story. Ratings for "Diary" Athena (technical quality): 8 Venus (plot & character): 8 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 8 |