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"Trouble Maker" by John Smith (fantasy gang-bang) 9, 9, 7
"Trouble Maker" by John Smith (pervitron@hotmail.com). Guest review by Sandman (sandman@bitsmart.com). When does "No" really mean "Oh God, Yes! Fuck me! Use me!"? Probably when the woman's strongest sexual fantasy involves being raped and she actively seeks out situations that will allow this to happen. This is helped by the fact that she's drop-dead gorgeous and has a husband willing to help her in her trouble making. Now a good way to get raped is to dress very sexy and stand on a crowded subway train and accidentally touch the men around you. Then your husband sets the mood by holding you in a very suggestive position before a very dangerous looking black man. Men after all are very simple, predictable creatures. And of course in this story Shelly gets everything she wants; so does her husband. This story did one very good thing right. It stayed a fantasy just enough for me to hold my disbelief at bay. This was no mean feat at all, given the rape, even when softened with the fantasy-come-true excuse. Oh - a few questions bubbled to the surface as I was reading the story, like what happens if the men start turning on the other women in the car? Did the author really have to insist on giving a thirteen-year-old boy a front-row-center seat for this performance? Am I really comfortable with the message: "The boy watched me so intently, and every few seconds he'd look up from my ass and we'd lock eyes. We were staring at each other when Bulls came. You see, the boy knew in his gut that I liked it, he knew I really didn't want help. He watched me so closely. He saw the ripple of pleasure that spread across my face when Bulls emptied himself all over the inside front of my skirt." Despite the suspension of disbelief, I had to wonder if this boy's first date would be nearly so amused as Shelly was. No; with that aspect I wasn't comfortable at all. But if you remove the boy from the story, it's actually a very enjoyable fantasy. But since the boy and the message are an important part of the story the final appeal suffers accordingly. Ratings for "Trouble Maker" Athena (technical quality): 9 Venus (plot & character): 9 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 7 |