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"Chance" by Windrider (romance) 10, 10, 8
"Chance" by Windrider (windridr@nospam.datanet.ab.ca) (repost by John Dark). This review is the personal opinion of Kim, who can be contacted at ghost@nym.alias.net. . And another little milestone is reached, with my sixtieth review. Amazing "Chance" is a wonderfully observed exploration of the notion that sometimes the nice does get the girl. Our first person narrator is Bruce, a shy twenty- eight-year-old who's returning home from the movies when he hears the sound of crying coming from a doorway. It's late at night and the temperature's dropped to twenty below. The crying, it transpires, is coming from newly runaway eighteen year-old Julie, penniless, freezing and desperate. What's a guy to do, under the circumstances? Why, take her home and treat her like a lady, of course. What follows is the growing relationship of these two very nice people, as they stumble towards a relationship, and inevitably sexual union. I really loved this story up to this point, but then I'm afraid it lost it with the sex scene. I'm sure many of you will disagree, but it seemed a real shame that a such a warm, believable story should be let down by silly cliched sex. The girl only has to get a dick near her and she's orgasming semi- continuously, while the guy's got a big dick that remains hard through about four orgasms of its own. I shouldn't be so harsh, I guess, because the sex is pretty hot, if - for me at least - lacking in reality or credibility. Had the author been a bit more restrained with the multiple orgasms all round, then it would have been straight tens from me. Shame, because I really did like this story, with its refreshingly gentle approach. Ratings for "Chance" Athena (technical quality): 10 (nothing wrong. Really good, in fact) Venus (plot & character): 10 (very well done, very believable) Kim (appeal to reviewer): 8 (shoulda been ten, if only... ) |