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"Artist" by Paris Waterman (stroke story) 9, 8.5, 9 {Not yet archived} "Artist" by Paris Waterman (the_panda@hotmail.com). Guest review by jubjub. {Not yet archived} This is a stroke story--at least it appears to be one. Apologies to the author if I'm wrong. This brings up a minor point that I had problems with. The story is told from the viewpoint of the woman. The writer clearly attempts to describe a conflict the woman has with casual sex. However, these attempts merely serve to blur the intent of the story. Technically, the story isn't too bad. Grammar, punctuation and spelling were all but perfect (a few punctuation glitches). The major markdown was more stylistic. First off, the male character had a "monster" cock. The further fixation on size and repetitive use of the word "monster" tended to distract somewhat from the story--not to mention the multiple female orgasms. A third problem dealt with the story arch. Describing a single sex act means the writer should end the story with a sexual climax. Yet the buildup seemed flat. This story got me going but never seemed focused and tight enough to send me over the edge. That's fine enough, but not good enough to warrant a 10. A very good story. Ratings for "Artist" Technical: 9 A few quibbles Characterization and Plot: 8.5 Physical action hard to follow. Appeal: 9 Nicely erotic but not the perfect story