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"The Beach" by Alex Schriener (hot sex) 10, 8, 6 http://www.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=246236038 "The Beach" by Alex Schriener (schriene@ridgecrest.ca.us). This is a simple, brief description of a man and a woman making passionate love on a secluded beach. It uses the second person ("you") perspective. It would have been extremely easy to rewrite this from a third person perspective, but the author has chosen to just dump onto the newsgroup something he wrote for a specific individual without taking into consideration the perspective of the people who will read it. It's still a decent story. Ratings for "The Beach" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 8 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 6