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"E-Maled" by David Shaw (blackmail) 3, 1, 0
"E-Maled" by David Shaw (shaw david@hotmail.com). Guest Review by R'khaan (rkhaan@ix.netcom.com) "The Sniffer," as he's known to his co-conspirators, is one sick puppy. He gets his kicks hacking into his corporate network and stealing company email messages (illegal as hell) where, along with selected cohorts, stalks and subsequently blackmails (two more federal offenses) his unsuspecting female coworkers into sexual activities. This story has little or no erotic value to it unless, of course, you are cut in the mold of "The Sniffer" and this kind of drivel appeals to you. If anything, this writing will have people thinking twice about putting their business out via their corporate email network. The author of this work might not get people masturbating over his work, but he has done everyone a public service: Be careful of what you email at work! Ratings for "E-Maled" R'khaan (technical quality): 3 R'khaan (plot & character): 1 R'khaan (appeal to reviewer): 0 Review of "Swing Man" by Chili Peeler (chilepeelr@aol.com). Guest review by Dave Myers. You've heard of the (mostly silly) analogies drawn between baseball and sex. Well, there's one aspect where I have to admit the writing of sex stories does compare with the sport. Imagine a long fly ball to center field, hanging over the fence and falling fast. Will it make it out of the park? Or will it be caught for an out a moment later? Moral of the story: even if you had good ideas when you started writing, if you don't end with a bang, a twist, a punch, or at least a flourish, your reader (that's me!) will be prone to ignore your nice plotting and buildup to the last few sections. The long fly ball will not be remembered, except for the out. Synopsis: This long-ish tale centers around a family man whose married life is over, for all intents and purposes. In order to fight the boredom, he starts swinging, with his brother's help. Later he is seduced by his 20-year-old daughter. These two distinct plot lines merge in a hot way, but not completely gracefully. One key voyeuristic linkup scene (with daughter looking on) could have been given more feeling. Still, it was pretty hot. Other than this, and a completely superfluous and distracting drug subplot, the first half or more of the story is quite readable. But at a certain point the writing of the sex sequences becomes too rote. What starts off so well becomes more and more like much of the incest-themed text currently out on the newsgroups: expectable. Rating: 7.5 |