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"Sordid Conception," by Chili Peeler (swapping and watching)
9, 10, 10
"Sordid Conception," by Chili Peeler (chilepeelr@aol.com). Guest Review by R'khaan (rkhaan@ix.netcom.com) When Celeste asked me to review this story, she added a note telling me it had been hanging around for a while waiting to be reviewed. And I'll be damned if I know why. This story is so delightfully filthy I'm not sure where to begin. Okay, so we have Sharon Larrington having a conversation with her daughter-in-law, Brenda. Seems like Brenda and Chris have been trying to put a bun in the oven but, as it turns out, Chris' soldiers ain't marching to the beat. After a debate on getting the job done artificially – something Brenda isn't fond of considering – Sharon has the audacity to suggest that Brad, the hunky 19-year-old-brother of Chris, knock the boots and get the job done in his brother's place. Now, if this was simply a story about surrogate parenting and the thrill of a younger brother getting a piece of his sexy sister-in-law, it would be worth the time it takes to download and read it. But, as you might imagine, things aren't always what they appear to be. After a pretty convincing argument, Brenda agrees to the plan. Later in the evening, Sharon gets ready for bed, only to find Brad in her bed, naked, hard, and ready. After Brad and Sharon kick some major holes in the walls, Sharon tells Brad of the plan to impregnate Brenda and, of course, the horny teen is more than willing to do the job. To make this a little shorter, Brad and Brenda do the horizontal bop while Sharon watches. What started out as "business" on Brenda's part turns out to be just the thing she's been dreaming of, finding herself responding to Brad as he works his magic. Afterwards, Brenda's on her way home, Brad is still hot to trot and Sharon? Well, you can fry eggs on the girl. Brad convinces this mother to shlob his knob right in the living room. Brenda runs out of gas and returns to her mother-in-law's house and, you guessed it, walks in on the action between Brad and his mother. After some soul-bearing, Brenda readily agrees to Brad's suggested that they all go upstairs and get wild. Which they do like no one's business. The payoff is Brenda gets knocked up and gives birth to a baby girl. At the celebration, Chris offers a toast to his wife and brother for the baby, much to Sharon and Brad's surprise. Brenda confesses to them that she told Chris everything – and I mean everything. To further celebrate things, Chris heads up the stairs to get a piece of his mother and, yes, Brad and Brenda get ready to do their thing again. This story would have gotten all tens had it not been for the overuse of ellipses and little things like two spaces after a period, etc. Other than that, this was da bomb! Ratings for "Sordid Conception" R'khaan (technical quality): 9 R'khaan (plot & character): 10 R'khaan (appeal to reviewer): 10 |