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"Diana's Slavery" by EzRiter (sex slavery) 5, 5, 4
"Diana's Slavery" by EzRiter (ezriter@hotmail.com). Guest review by R'khaan (rkhaan@ix.netcom.com). {Story Link: This story contains a few things which, in reality, could get a person arrested just about everywhere in the US, which is probably why it appeals to some folks. The character of David, seems to have a major problem with the star of this story, Diana. Seems likes the lady is the Grand Poobah of the local Order of Cock Teasers. Instead of being put off by her demeanor and just moving on to greener pastures, David decides to enslave Diana. Right away, two things become instantly apparent: Diana's in deep shit and David is someone who has major problems with women. After arriving an hour late for a tutoring session to be given by David, Diana spends more time teasing the irate David than concentrating on whatever they were studying. Finally, David has taken about all he can take and sets his plan in motion, injecting Diana with some type of paralyzing agent which leaves her totally at David's mercy. I'm not sure if what happens next is classic S&M-type stuff, but David goes on a verbal tirade, humiliating his victim and promising her plenty of pain while clearly enjoying his moment of triumph. After copping a few feels and subjecting Diana to more terror, he ties her up and lets her marinate in her fear for a while. Finally, David produces a whip and proceeds to whip the hapless Diana into total submission. Of course, the lady's begging and pleading with him, offering him everything she has, as well as some other girl I assume they both know. She tries to bribe him with her coochie and, somewhat out of character, he rejects the offer. In a way, the offer does seem hollow, since David already has her where he wants her. As you continue to read the story, you just know Diana is in serious trouble. But, wait! We soon discover Diana is down for this type of sex, having gotten tied to a tree, beaten and then fucked hard by her drunken boyfriend! A tree? As it turns out, the boyfriend is totally repulsed after finding out Diana really got her cookies off and leaves her, which doesn't make sense as he was the one who tied her to the tree in the first place. David just happened to come across this scene, explaining how he knew his plan would work. Diana, however, appears to be surprised when she realizes David must have seen this, though I can't imagine why: If you're tied to a tree, getting your ass beat and then summarily fucked, it stands to reason someone is going to see or hear it, right? The rest of the story is filled with I suppose is routine, beat-that-ass-with- the whip stuff, and Diana is eventually beaten into submission, loving every minute of it. David cuts Diana down, dopes her up again, covers her up and leaves the Grand Poobah lying unconscious. Other than the graphic descriptions of Diana's capture and eventual torture, this reviewer wasn't put off as much by the kidnapping, assault and battery, possession of controlled substances and a lot more illegal activities along these lines as he was put off by the author's overuse of ellipses! I recommend the author use more commas and/or semi-colons in his/her writing to assist with the flow of the story. By overdoing the ellipses, David comes off as an absentminded maniac with a speech impediment more than he does someone who wants to humiliate/dominate Diana. I am pleased to see, however, the author was thoughtful enough to provide a disclaimer for anyone who reads this work. I hope the readers take it to heart. Ratings for "Diana's Slavery" R'khaan (technical quality): 5 (too many ellipses) R'khaan (plot & character): 5 R'khaan (appeal to reviewer):4 |