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"Just a Normal Night with Zel" by Steve S (romance) 7
"Just a Normal Night with Zel" by Steve S (sentualrush@hotmail.com). Guest review by Dave Myers. {Story Link: Do we need another story code? Maybe not; but recently, there has been a flood of stories of the type that are neither aptly described by "MF rom" nor "TRUE". I think it's wonderful that by taking a few small liberties with history, people are able to gratifyingly put down on paper (or more accurately, record electronically!) the most interesting parts of their sex lives. The best part is that the quality of the postings in this genre has risen considerably above the Penthouse forum-esque stuff of a few years ago. I'm only surprised none of the disclaimers have the irresistible tagline, "Based on true events". Synopsis: In "Just a Normal Night with Zel", we start out with a slightly high-strung teacher who is grading papers while playing a little hard to get with his lover, Zelia. They wind up in each others' arms before long. The charm of this snapshot of an evening is in its relative universality for longtime MF couples. The author conveys a sense of well-trodden ground in the sexual habits of the characters, and mixes it thoroughly with the messy details of tension between lovers. This is mid-workweek sex between weary folk that must contend with getting up in the morning. People who know each other very well, including those ticks that annoy each other. People who need somewhat of a catalyst in order for the situation to unfold. The chief stumbling block in this text is the pacing; the action peaks a little too soon. The author glides through a great shower sequence without triteness, then follows up with some less impressive writing during a cock- sucking interlude, which leads to the substellar final fuck. With a story this short (about 200 lines), I'm left feeling like I sneezed and missed the climax. Rating: 7 |