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"Posing: A story in two parts" by Jonathan Cooper (art & sex) 8, 9, 8
"Posing: A story in two parts" by Jonathan Cooper (agjonath@ozemail.com.au). Reviewed by Mark Aster (myfrthal@aol.com). A nice sexy premise, some good writing, some hot sex. We have a young artist and a well-built model, with the refreshing difference that the artist is female and the model is male. But the end result is about as expected The subject line gave a storycode of "f/m"; to put it strictly in the Current Convention, it would be "MF", or possible "FM". Adults The author uses a couple of related interesting gimmicks here. The story is told twice, once from the viewpoint of each character. To help us compare the two versions, the paragraphs are numbered. The numbering strikes me as sort of silly; given that the two accounts are very similar in all particulars, I can't imagine that a reader would need any help in figuring out what parts of the two go together! And, more deeply, it seems sort of a waste that the two accounts are SO similar. I imagine the author intends there to be interesting differences between them, but I didn't find any in a natural reading (and I'm not willing to do a line-for-line comparison to look for them). The two stories are really just the same one story twice, with a few slight nods to point of view. In some cases, the two are nearly word-for-word identical: "squeezed my middle finger deep into her cunt alongside my tool" vs. "squeezed a finger into my cunt alongside his tool", for instance. So it was really like reading the story twice, which was OK since it was a nice sexy story, but it didn't live up to the expectations engendered by the device. Numbers (noting that I'm a hard grader): Athena: 8 (good writing, sort of distracting paragraph numbers) Venus: 9 (pant, pant) Mark: 8 (good story) |