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"Keeping Warm in the Arctic Circle" by Gordie D (tundra love).
jubjub: 9.7, 9.8, 9.8
"Keeping Warm in the Arctic Circle" by Gordie D (gordond103@aol.com). Guest review by jubjub. --- Story Summary: A married couple living on the frozen tundra This is not a sex story. This is a meandering story of a man and a woman living in the deep north. It just happens to end with their lovemaking. A very nice piece, indeed. Technically, the piece is just shy of perfection. My biggest beef is that the voice of the narrator doesn't come through consistently. There were also a couple of misspellings and a punctuation mistake or two. None of this is amounts to a lot, though. However, what I find especially pleasing is that the writer presents almost a textbook example of how to write erotica without explicit mentioning the naughty body parts more than once. The characters in this story are very well drawn. Even better, they are drawn using dialogue and action--not the standard idiot speech that tends to be the norm for most amateur writers. You can almost imagine you're sitting beside a roaring fireplace listening to a grizzled storyteller spinning this tale. You know this couple by the time this story is finished, and you are heartened by the love they have for each other. But I thought the omniscient viewpoint fuzzed the focus of the story somewhat. I also thought the sex scene was a little cliched. But otherwise, it worked for me. Do I like this story? Yes, very much. I like this story not for its erotic power (which really is tame) but for its presentation of life and love in the wild north. Ratings for "Keeping Warm in the Arctic Circle" Technical: 9.7 Narrative voice could be more consistent Characterization and Plot: 9.8 A little cliched Appeal: 9.8 Very impressive |