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"Brie Falls Behind the Eight Ball" by The Warthog (slut wife sex)
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"Brie Falls Behind the Eight Ball" by The Warthog. Guest review by Dave Myers. The Warthog has been at the slut-wife story business for a some time now. While there is never much variation in the chain of events in his stories, he manages to sharpen this sub-genre to a fine point at times. Notable past stories have included "Lori's Risky Wager" and "Bobbi's Half-time Special". Unfortunately, this text falls a little short of those efforts. Synopsis: A couple have not even consummated their wedding when their honeymoon goes awry due to a pool hustler. Will they ever be reunited ? The plot device is simple enough and quite effective. The Warthog rarely makes things any more complicated than they need to be. Enough details flow from his quill to keep the fantasy rolling until about three quarters into the story, when Brie's submission fades into prostitution/slavery. Up to this point, the fantasy part of my brain was having no trouble crowding out the critic part. Following similar lines to "Honeymoon in Vegas", Brie is handed over from husband to pool shark. From there, her first sexual encounters are rough, but she has a good idea of what to expect. Eventually, her captivity becomes much more than what was originally bargained for. Now, I have no problems with stories of the nc/slavery/prostitution type, and there are a few very good ones out there. But the characterization of Brie just disappears at this point in the text, and we are left with something too distant to be satisfying. While earlier in the plot Brie shows brief flashes of glowing in her own submissiveness, as well as moments of sobbing over the situation, we get no indication of her feelings for a long stretch of the plot during which she is separated from her husband. Even then, it is fair to say we have a case of writer's sin of omission. The Warthog tidies up with some nice details in the final paragraphs, but can't patch up the problem completely. Verdict: The windup looks like a doozie, but the pitch just fizzles out. Rating: 7 |