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"Dismaid" by Adrian Hunter (bdsm) 10, 4, -
"Dismaid" by Adrian Hunter (adrianhunter@geocities.com). Guest review by Sandman (sandman@bitsmart.com) Well it was bound to happen sooner or later. I finally get my very first BDSM story to review. Generally I tend to prefer my sex between equals but I'm not adverse to a little fantasy, fantasy role-playing as long as everyone has fun. I've never really delved that deeply into this genre though. Keep that in mind -- my inexperience in this area may influence your decision to read this. The story opens with a woman, whose dress was described in excruciating detail, scrubbing the floor with an old toothbrush which is "attached to a chain draped between her preoccupied nipples with a too-short piece of string." Did I mention she had a vibrator stuffed up her pussy while she's doing this? Poor woman has an orgasm too. Which is kinda unfortunate since she makes noise and utters a word that's not exactly French when she's clearly been told to speak only French and only when told to speak. Sigh, guess she'll just have to be punished. From there the story moves to a short M/f scene followed by a rather painful sounding final punishment. I've seen Adrian Hunter's works in the newsgroup before, though I confess I've never read his stories. I actually approached the story with anticipation since this was an author who obviously knew the genre and thus could introduce me to the full appeal of BDSM. I read the story three times. I still don't get it. Oh I get the story easy enough. Man has woman at beck and call, clean the floor with a toothbrush, bend over cuz I feel like fucking now, etc, etc. The story's very simplistic along those lines. What I don't get is the appeal. Set the story a hundred years in the future where everyone has their own android and the woman (now android) would be little different. A few slight modifications and this story is ready made for alt.sex.robots. The woman simply wasn't real - she might as well have been a poodle. Furthermore there wasn't any suspense, no surprise, no drama, and no sense of accomplishment. The male narrator controlled the story as easily as a puppet master maneuvers his puppet. So I'm left asking myself is this story typical of the author's prior work? Is this story typical of "hard core" BDSM as a general rule? I think I'd have to answer no to both questions. I doubt that this story is a showcase of the author's talents as much as I doubt that all of BDSM could be this one-dimensional. The technical skill displayed was flawless. The author has a very smooth writing style and can be quite painstaking in the details that set the overall mood. The plot really didn't make any sense though and there really was only one character in this story (the narrator) and his motivations and rational were never really fleshed out. The final refuge of Venus, the sex, was too short and not evocative. I'm going to hedge my bet here and leave the appeal blank. Personally the appeal was a zero, but if you read this story and find that I completely missed the mark I *REALLY* would appreciate a note clueing me in. Ratings for "DisMaid" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 4 Sandman (appeal to reviewer): -- |