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"Train Journey" by Madeleine (sex on a train) 8, 6, 6
"Train Journey" by Madeleine (Madeleine_t@yahoo.com). Guest review by Dart. A young lady has a sleeping berth on the night train from London to Edinburgh. Upon boarding the train, she wonders how many women may have seduced the rather dishy steward, and decides that it might be pleasant if she added herself to their number. But then she observes a handsome, fortyish man saying farewell to a cute young thing on the platform, and decides that he, not the steward, will be the night's plaything. Luckily, he takes the adjoining berth, and with the proper threat, she entices the steward to unlock the communicating door after the handsome stranger has departed for the lounge car. I guess such young ladies prefer the dramatic entrance rather than just flirting with their chosen partner in the lounge car, and then taking him back to his, or her, berth. The next morning when the steward delivers her her tea, she, ever thoughtful, rewards him for his help the previous evening, but then, sadly, there's no time for her tea. It's off to her meeting in Edinburgh. The meeting over, she catches the afternoon train for the return trip to London, and is delighted to find that she has the first-class compartment to herself. It allows her to truly indulge herself with the steamy novel she's reading. Such exquisite solitude rarely lasts, however, and she is eventually joined by a fellow traveler. As first she's annoyed, but then adaptive in a fashion that brings pleasure to both of the compartment's occupants. This is a first story by this author. I think she should keep writing. I also think that she should make use of a proofreader, and give more thought to character development, since, for me, the sex scenes were warmly erotic, but they were prevented from being steamy by the unbelievable behavior of the story's main character Ratings for "Train Journey" Athena (technical quality): 8 Venus (plot & character): 6 Dart (appeal to reviewer): 6 |