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"Incubus" {Revised version} by Darkside (TG psychological thriller). DG: 9, 10, 10 http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/12757.txt 01 http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/12758.txt 02 http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/12759.txt 03 http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/12760.txt 04 http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/12761.txt 05 http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/12762.txt 06 http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/12763.txt 07 http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/12764.txt 08 http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/12765.txt 09 --- http://www.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=368731830 01 http://www.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=368731836 02 http://www.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=368731842 03 http://www.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=368731848 04 http://www.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=368731854 05 http://www.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=368731860 06 http://www.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=368731866 07 http://www.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=368731872 08 http://www.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=368731877 09 "Incubus" {Revised version} by Darkside (Darkside@nym.alias.net). Guest review by DG. http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/12757.txt 01 http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/12758.txt 02 http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/12759.txt 03 http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/12760.txt 04 http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/12761.txt 05 http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/12762.txt 06 http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/12763.txt 07 http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/12764.txt 08 http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/12765.txt 09 --- http://www.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=368731830 01 http://www.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=368731836 02 http://www.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=368731842 03 http://www.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=368731848 04 http://www.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=368731854 05 http://www.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=368731860 06 http://www.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=368731866 07 http://www.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=368731872 08 http://www.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=368731877 09 I reviewed this story a few months ago, and was frustrated by the fact that a complex, well-plotted tale was badly compromised by sloppy writing, grammar, and formatting. I made a deal with the author to re- review the story if he gave it a thorough cleaning-up, and he has done just that. Here is the story summary from my original review: A deranged serial killer is on the loose. One of his victims, a young woman named Carolyn, is saved by a psychic, a young man named David, who is able to determine where she is being held hostage. In the process of her rescue, David and Carolyn switch bodies. This rather bizarre plot twist is handled well by the author. Before they can switch back, David and Carolyn must come to terms with what happened to them. In particular, Carolyn is haunted by her mistreatment at the hands of the killer. They find that they are developing romantic feelings towards each other, which are complicated by Carolyn's feelings for her best female friend. The story as reposted last week is cleanly formatted, and although the writing style is not perfect, it does not interfere with the storytelling, which is excellent. I can now strongly recommend the story to anyone who enjoys a tense psychological thriller. Ratings for "Incubus" Athena (technical quality): 9 Venus (plot & character): 10 DG (appeal to reviewer): 10