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"Bionic Freshman" by Unknown Author (college sex) 8, 7, 5
"Bionic Freshman" by Unknown Author). Guest review by BillyG (hayden@mindless.com). As a young teenager just recently and barely initiated, I dreamed of sex almost constantly, it seemed. More often my imagination led me to magical thinking, that state where, in the place of life's reality, I substituted scenarios that held me as the beloved. I didn't have to overcome shyness or social awkwardness in my dreams. To the contrary, I had only to imagine a sexual situation and it just happened, magically. Just the way I wanted it to happen and without the anxiety of real interaction. With maturation, most of us, I think, move away from the magical world of adolescent imagination and toward the greater eroticism of reality. One's personal position on this continuum will influence their reaction to the story, "Bionic Freshman." Those emotionally closer to being freshmen will perhaps identify and appreciate more the story line and its premises. Consider, if you will, the situation that finds our terminally horny freshman male the helpless recipient of the intoxicating and overpowering sexual advances of a beautiful blonde professor who's experimenting with the aphrodisiacal powers of a "hitherto unknown root recently discovered in a certain section of the Amazon rain forest." Our student and his sexy professor are found screwing sans seduction or foreplay in the first few paragraphs. The tone of the story is given definition immediately by such phrases as: ". . . a gallon of cum was going to gush down that beautiful throat . . . hugely swollen organ . . . John's spurting cock was halfway down her throat . . . [and] The head of John's cock swelled up like a fiery red orange preventing him from withdrawing." Hyperbole and anatomic exaggeration quickly numb our senses to that point of sad realization that there are no subtleties, no innuendo, indeed, no surprises left. At the conclusion of Chapter Four, we're given to understand that it is to be continued. More, there's a hint of male-male sexual coupling and perhaps even incest. We have little doubt that this and any other imagined sexual excess will be accomplished without thought or difficulty employing the all-powerful extract of some Amazon rainforest root. Aside from guys like me when I was thirteen, I doubt this will have a generalized appeal. My advice to the (unknown) author would be to consciously tone down exaggeration and magical thinking, allowing room for human reality. At root, it's far more erotic. Ratings for "Bionic Freshman" Athena (technical quality): 8 (A single out loud reading would pick up many of the errors.) Venus (plot & character): 7 (stunted plot with almost no character) BillyG (appeal to reviewer): 5 (I'd have rated it higher when I was 13.) |