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"Saliva" by Hugo Alkaviade (voyeurism & masturbation)
10, 9, 9
"Saliva" by Hugo Alkaviade (alkaviade@cyberdude.com). Michael is a German high school boy who lusts after Christine from afar. At least he lusts from afar when he's not standing behind her in a crowd and copping a feel. Later in the story he watches Christine and some other girls working out on the athletic field while he masturbates and imagines fucking them in their vestiary. That sentence will have a different meaning to Americans than to Germans, because Americans don't know what a vestiary is. My hope is that they will think it is part of the anatomy and will laugh like hell when they realize that it's part of a building. I liked this story. It's simple but good. Not great yet - that'll be this author's next story, perhaps - but a very nice impression of a high school boy trying to get his act together with regard to the women in his life. Ratings for "Saliva" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 9 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9 |