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"Stolen" by SR (cybersex) 5, 6, 6
"Stolen" by SR (parasol_60@yahoo.com). Guest review by Dart. Katy and Pamela are online together and have decided to take turns playing slut and voyeur. They set up a private chat room. Katy lures Jack into the room, and she talks him through an orgasm while Pamela watches. Then, after a short private chat between themselves, Steve is lured into the room, the women switch roles, and Pamela talks him through a climax while Katy, mostly, watches. In the final private chat between the two women, Pamela confesses that she's been capturing their proceedings, and hopes that Katy's not upset about it. She isn't, and in fact wants a copy of the file. This could have been an excellent story, but it's not. The problem is that it reads like I imagine an actual captured chat file would read. The story needs editing. It should also provide - for those readers unfamiliar with chat notation, such as myself - an explanation of chat notation. Ratings for "Stolen" Athena (technical quality): 5 Venus (plot & character): 6 Dart (appeal to reviewer): 6 |