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"Angel of Mercy" by Unknown Author (medical sex) 9, 9, 9
"Angel of Mercy" by Unknown Author. Guest review by Sandman (sandman@bitsmart.com). "Angel of Mercy" is about a doctor and a nurse who after pulling a double shift together go back to her place engage in some very well described oral sex and just generally fuck like bunnies for four pages or so. On the first read it appeared to be my sort of story in that the characters were introduced nicely before hopping into bed together, but for some reason this one just missed it's mark with me. I should stress the "with me" part -- I suspect many, many people will enjoy this story far more than my scores would indicate. In Athena I knock off a point for a few mangled words and for one sentence with two buts in it (but if they were sexual butts this would not be a problem, but I think that a sentence with two buts just doesn't work very well -- see?). The story also contains no dialog and I think the story would have worked better for me on a personal level if it did. Other than those faults however the story is a very easy read. Most people will have no problems whatsoever following the story flow. In Venus I'm knocking off a point for exactly two problems that had me scratching my head and saying, "Huh?". First problem -- does a doctor in the midst of trying to save an eighty-six year old man in cardiac arrest really notice that his nurse isn't wearing panties? Second problem -- this is kinda a good news bad news problem -- in the throws of anal sex we suddenly learn about the "B Spot". "I was concerned that her clitoris would get too sensitive for me to continue licking it and so I concentrated on that special sensitive area where the Bartholin ducts run up to the clitoris. I call it the B spot and not many people know how important it is between orgasms if the clitoris is sensitive." This was something new to me and I set the story aside and searched my on-line references to research the validity of this. Surprise! It's valid (though not every woman responds to it). So I learn something new. I'm glad to know it, and I'm certainly going to see if it works at the first opportunity I get. The trouble is, it happened in the middle of a pretty hot sex scene. A sex scene is about feeling and emotion, throwing an intellectual anatomy lesson in the midst of this is like asking an Olympic Athlete who just got a gold medal how they feel about a new development in quantum physics. And finally we come to appeal. I said before that most people will like this story much more than my scores would indicate. Here the appeal is just a little off because to me there's never been anything remotely sexual about doctors or nurses. Every time I see either they're either trying to stick a needle in me, trying to get me to drink some bitter concoction, or I'm so bloody sick I really don't care. I think this is called an avoidance reaction. The fact that the scores are relatively high despite my prejudices in this area should indicate that this story is probably worth looking up. Ratings for "Angel of Mercy" Athena (technical quality): 9 Venus (plot & character): 9 Sandman (appeal to reviewer): 9 |