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"Sleeping With Friends" by Unknown Author (adolescent
romance) 8, 8, 9/5
"Sleeping With Friends" by Unknown Author. Guest review by BillyG. Remember how quickly romantic things happened in high school? Did you ever fall in love suddenly? With a person you'd been with just once? And wham! It happened? The intensity of the feelings, however transient they might have proven to be, in that glorious moment, argued for 'forever.' If you can recall that mind- bending emotion of overwhelming 'love,' you'll be able to get your head around this story. Or at least part of it. You see, this story is actually two stories, one having little to do emotionally with the other. Let me explain. The storyteller protagonist, Aaron, is a 17-year-old high school student who has the hots for his best friend James's twin sister, Jessica. Hanging out with them one night, Aaron is goaded by Jessica into telling about being with a naked girl and how he 'almost did it.' The author of this tale has Aaron tell a hot story, one which affects Jessica directly, for she retreats to her room to masturbate with a carrot and a banana. James nonchalantly informs Aaron that she likes to be watched and would he care to do just that? So far, this is shaping up to be a simple story of lets-watch-the-sister- masturbate. The intensity is turned up when Jessica, who has a history of 'doin' it with all the guys,' pulls our hero into bed to finish her off. Brother watches, beats off and then is asked to leave by sister. Yes, a little strange, but in uncomplicated voyeurism-exhibitionism stories, we don't hold out for an evolved plot. At this point, we're half-way through the story and it feels like it's ending. And it is, for the next chapter has a different feel. Our hero has fallen for the chick and is hopelessly and helplessly head-over-heels in love with Jessica. And, as it turns out, she is with him. Period. That's it. Sex story, voyeurism, and wham-bam over. Now it's love. The problem I have is the second chapter simply doesn't follow from the first. Read the first part. That's a fairly good stroke story. Skip the second; it just doesn't make it as anything. Ratings for "Sleeping With Friends" Athena (technical quality): 8 Venus (plot & character): 8 BillyG (appeal to reviewer): 9 for the first chapter and 5 for the second |