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"Thumper" by Dave Read (sex with teenage girl). Dave Myers: 4
"Thumper" by Dave Read (posted by Commander Jameson). Guest review by Dave Myers. --- There is an old raging debate on this newsgroup about whether it is really legitimate to conduct ratings on stories that are "jack-off" material. You know the kind, with very recognizable plotlines, stock characters, and nothing out of the ordinary. Personally, I think it's worth rating them if for nothing else than to urge writers to come up with something we haven't seen before. If you're going to write out of the tried and true playbooks, at least insert a hook which is quirky or unique. Some people argue that this is distracting, but I guarantee there are more out there that will be absorbed by your added kink. End rant. Synopsis: An older brother comes home to "babysit" his 16 y.o. sister, who decides to have a drinking/swim party. One of the very drunk guests gets deflowered by the brother. Potentially the most intriguing aspect of the story is the tantric sex subplot, which remains mostly unexplored in the story. Perhaps the writer decided it would not be believable to maintain this line of action with a virgin. As challenging as that seems, it would have been worth it. As written, the story is just trite. Rating for "Thumper": 4 |