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"Lust Potion 69" by JRParz (Spells R Us sex) 10, 6 ,3
"Lust Potion 69" by JRParz@aol.com . Guest review by Sandman (sandman@bitsmart.com). Since the author was kind enough to include a story summary I'll be kind enough to use it: "involving transgender (male to female). The story is called Lust Potion 69, and [I] felt it came out real good! High school boy uses potion to transform his dream girl into the ultimate female. In order to complete the spell, the boy takes the second part of the potion, which renders the girl his helpless slave, but the potion has side effects......" I should note that the story itself is actually much better written than the summary. Now why did thoughts of Spoonbender's "The Gene", Unknown's "All Night Long", and Garth Brook's "Unanswered Prayers" spring unbidden to my mind while I read this story? Actually this story is very similar to my previously reviewed "All Night Long." In "All Night Long" a girl is raped repeatedly throughout the night, but at least it ends -- the girl can pick up the remains of her life and move forward, or not. In "Lust Potion 69" the girl will be effectively raped (though outwardly she will love every minute, inside she knows what is happening to her and will hate her antagonist -- I ask you, is this not rape?) for the rest of her life. At sixteen her life ends. "Lust Potion 69" isn't as graphic as "All night long" (it's hardly graphic at all, it's the IDEA the counts here, not the act) and it uses nicer language but they're both cut from the same cloth. At sixteen it's an ultimate adolescent male fantasy to have an insatiable sex- slave, a fantasy woman as horny as a sixteen-year-old boy. If such things were possible, I'm sure sixteen-year-old boys would do it. Thus brought to my mind the other two thoughts which preface this review. Spoonbender's "The Gene" shows us very well what this relationship will be like when the boy is no-longer a boy and no longer a walking erection. Spoonbender marked his story horror. He was so right. And finally we come to Garth Brook's "Unanswered Prayers". In this story Jason's prayers were answered, but this story served to drive home exactly the point Garth Brook's classic song made: sixteen-year-old boys just do not pray for the right things. Looking on all this it must seem that I really hated this story. In actuality I was disappointed by this story. The story titillated but did not arouse. The story was well written but the author submitted to the "dark side of the force." There was the possibility of actually surprising the reader with an unexpected twist, maybe even redeeming the story by making it a cautionary tale (Be careful what you wish for), but the author gave it all away in the summary. I'm a fan of summaries -- I use them in my own stories -- but never give away a plot twist. In short I walked away from this story shaking my head at the wasted potential. The "Spells R Us" shop is a very interesting idea and one day a client will probably walk out of that shop and I'll be captivated from beginning to end (a zillion ideas spring to mind -- most of them cautionary tales, a few of them very fun!). It would not surprise me in the slightest to see this author appear on Celeste's top twenty or even top one-hundred one of these days, but it won't be with this story. Ratings for "Lust Potion 69" Athena (technical quality): 9 Venus (plot & character): 6 Sandman (appeal to reviewer): 3 |