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"The Encounter" by Mr Smee (cybersex & real sex) 9, 6, 7
"The Encounter" by Mr Smee. Guest review by Nick. Sometimes I sit back and wonder what the woman on the other end of the chatline/e-mail address/telephone actually looks like. It's tempting to assume that they are the ravishing beauties that your imagination runs away with; but I suspect that all too often they are any combination of old, fat, disfigured, male or even people at a drunken party having a laugh! Even when the woman at the other end is half-way good looking, you may well find that when you meet in the flesh, the physical chemistry simply isn't there for a variety of indefinable reasons. I could go on but I won't, suffice to say that my musings on the pitfalls of Real Life vs. Cyber fantasy affected my first reading. Lets just say that the guy (and the girl) in this story struck lucky! The story basically covers the culmination of a cyber-relationship which started with IRC chat, moving to e-mail through to telephone sex and finally to the real thing. As soon as that element of background is out of the way (page 1) the remainder of the story is simply straight down the middle, good ol' fashioned wall-to-wall sex (pages 2-5)! Its well written and rolls along nicely, but I did get confused as to what the girl was actually wearing. Top, jumper, dress, skirt, leggings (plus underwear of course) - it seemed she was ready for a game of strip poker!! I found myself quite impressed at the ability of the writer to carry the sex on for so many pages. He obviously enjoyed his work, and I found myself infected by his enthusiasm (the doctor prescribes penicillin!:))! In the end both protagonists came across as purely sexual beings - what might unkindly be put (certainly by their mutual spouses!) as "pieces of meat". I suspect, however, that this has a pretty wide appeal among ASS readers and so for them at least this probably isn't a criticism. For me, though, the impact of a sex story is increased by orders of magnitude if you have some depth to the characters and a plot of some significance (which this didn't). There is a sequel promised, but I do hope the writer moves on and doesn't provide just more of the same. I would like to see some of the background and character of the two being brought into play with a view to enhancing the sexual tension between them, perhaps. This is introduced as a first time post from a fledgling writer and as such is very good! Ratings for "The Encounter" Athena (technical quality) - 9 Aphrodite (plot and character) - 6 Nick (appeal to reviewer) - 7 |