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"Dancing In the Dark" by "Weird Writer" (Sex by Braille)
10, 9, 9
"Dancing in the Dark" by Weird Writer. Guest review by Dave Myers. { I got two guest reviews of this one by mistake.} The idea of an anonymous orgy is best suited to rather brief stories. Otherwise the scene becomes too ridiculous and the step away from scents, sounds, and ambiance is impossible since there won't be much character development in an anonymous setting. That's why I'm glad this story stays short. Even in 150 lines, though, it is quite possible to leave the reader with the essence of too many jumbled body parts. Body parts are not the same thing as the raw lust that should propel a scene like this. Synopsis: Our narrator receives an invitation to a party, which turns out to be an anonymous orgy taking place in pitch darkness. He has a good time. Group sex is hard to write for. I give the author credit for not making a total mess out of the situation, but there are a number of minor problems with the narrative. First is the hokey way that our adventurous partygoer is coaxed back into the world of the clothed (through what appears to be some sort of knock out gas). There is also the issue of how incredibly quickly our virile muffdiver manages to arrive at a second gushing orgasm, about 25 lines after the first. On the upside, the author gives us some rare male-male interaction amidst the action. The narrator's reactions are positive, if slightly unrealistic for what appears to be his first bisexual encounter. This passage could have been better written. We also get refreshing giggles and laughter during the orgy which manage to dispel what would otherwise be an over-serious affair, since there is no dialogue in the sex scene. Rating: 6.5 |