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"Mystical Workout" by Bioya61 (gymnasium sex) 6, 8, 8
"Mystical Workout" by Bioya61 (bioya61@aol.com). --- It's possible to carry simplicity too far. Here we have a guy with a vaguely described mid-life crisis, who meets a woman in a white leotard at the gym and has wonderful sex with her in the steam room. Had the set-up been done just a little better, I might have enjoyed the story a lot more. As it was, I couldn't help noticing that the woman in white talked a lot like a Chinese fortune cookie: ""You must relax and accept life for what it brings you each day. Life cannot be scheduled and planned; look to the unexpected." Once I got sidetracked, I was more aroused by my skepticism than by my hormones. I've been in steam rooms, and I'm just not really sure I'd like to have sex in one. Maybe your life experiences will make you less skeptical and allow you to enjoy this story more than I did. "never forget the unexpected is the fruit of life, share it with others." See! Even there, I'd like that final aphorism better if it began with a capital letter and didn't contain a comma splice. But then, what is a comma, but a pause in life's journey? Ratings for "Mystical Workout" Athena (technical quality): 6 Venus (plot & character): 8 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 8 |