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"To See Or Not To See" by J.B. Mast (public & private sex)
8, 8, 9
"To See Or Not To See" by J.B. Mast (Mastwords1@aol.com). Guest review by Dart. Adam and his wife Julie are having dinner out, celebrating his promotion to Vice President at Arrow Electronics. It's been ten years since Adam started his career at Arrow, and they had celebrated that beginning at the same restaurant, and with the same menu selection that they have ordered this evening. Julie planned the evening that way; she remembers such things, but she doesn't think Adam does. He surprises her by remembering that evening, by remembering that they're at the same restaurant and have ordered the same dishes. But he also remembers how they excited each other during dinner. That portion of their previous celebration wasn't part of Julie's plan for this evening--she had a different, more exotic, sexual agenda planned--but Adam is very encouraging and Julie's a supportive spouse. What follows is a pretty steamy scene of public sex, and then, in the ladies' room, of private sex. Back at their table, Julie's so washed out that she's not sure she has the energy for Adam's planned "dessert." But when Adam learns what it is .... Well, Julie's a very supportive wife. I really liked this story, but I do have some complaints. I think the dialogue is a tad too formal for the scene the story describes. I also think, though this is certainly arguable, that given the way Adam and Julie's encounter unfolded at the restaurant table, the wrong person was on their knees in the ladies' room. There were also minor typo and editing problems. Adam was once referred to as "Michael." In the paragraph: He took a bite of bread and then forked some salad while I watched. She had her eyes locked onto his, smiling at him as she unbuttoned her crisp white shirt top with her long slim fingers. the "I" should be "she," unless it's kinkier than I believe. With a very little assistance from one of Celeste's marvelous proofreaders, this good story could have been even better. Ratings for "To See Or Not To See" Athena (technical quality): 8 Venus (plot & character): 8 Dart (appeal to reviewer): 9 |