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"Every Lollipop Loves A Licking" by Erin Halfelven
(cheating game) 10, 10, 10
"Every Lollipop Loves A Licking" by Erin Halfelven (erotonomicon@hotmail.com). --- Let me start out by saying right up front that this is a well written story. That way I'll feel comfortable poking fun at the author for this sentence: "I grinned at the lady in the seat facing me who may have thought I had worms from her expression." The above sentence contain a misplaced modifier. At first reading it gives the impression that the narrator had somehow acquired worms from the other lady's expression." It would have been better to put it this way: "I grinned at the lady in the seat facing me, whose expression suggested that she may have thought I had worms." Or perhaps some other way - maybe in iambic pentameter. Misplaced modifiers are discussed in the excerpt from Celestial Grammar that is appended to the end of these reviews. Anyway, Jake and Ruth go a long way back together. Even though each is in a stable relationships with someone else, they still meet for the occasional rendezvous. They even have the support of their mates for these little flings. The gimmick is that one partner gives the other a clue to signal when and where the rendezvous will occur. Failure to decipher results in a penalty. I enjoyed the story. I had more fun disabusing myself of "facts" that I had assumed were true and trying to figure out exactly where the story takes place than in deciphering the clue, "Every Lollipop Loves A Licking." Ratings for "Every Lollipop Loves A Licking" Athena (technical quality): 10 (even the one gaffe was fun) Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 |