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"Innocence Not Lost" by Tristesssa (child sex-abuse) 6, 8, 8
"Innocence Not Lost" by Tristesssa (Tristesssa@aol.com). This is a story about a 5- to 6-year-old girl who gets molested by her grandfather. The awkward grammar could be improved with the help of a proofreader. The spellcheck does not solve all the problems; for example, we still have "fallow" (which happens to be a word), in place of "follow." In addition, the story is sometimes logically incoherent. We know that the child is crying and that she says she hates her grandfather for what he is doing; but at the end she says she enjoyed those interludes with her grandfather. Such ambivalence is realistic in situations of child abuse; but it is reasonable to expect emotions to be expressed a little more clearly than this. This is not a sexy story, but it is a poignant story. If this is, in fact, a true story (as it purports to be), this victim should see a counselor. The feelings of ambivalence and guilt that are associated with such activities can be controlled, but usually not without professional help. Ratings for "Innocence Not Lost" Athena (technical quality): 6 Venus (plot & character): 8 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 8 |