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"The Trap Door" by Lord Malinov (voyeurism & quickie)
10, 10, 10
"The Trap Door" by Lord Malinov (malinov@mindless.com). Ted has planned a romantic weekend getaway with Brenda. But Ivan asks him to drop off some information with Shelley and to go over it with her before he leaves town. But when Ted drops by Shelley's apartment, she's not expecting him; in fact, she's all hot and bothered about something. She excuses herself for a few minutes, and then Ted overhears her having telephone sex with Ray. In fact, she's on the phone with Ray, telling him that Ted is driving her into sexual ecstasy. What's a guy to do? And if he does, what's a girl to do? And if they do, what's the other girl to do? I think we have the basic framework of a country-western song here. Shania, if you're reading this, you can have it. MY ending would have been for Ted to continue listening from the hall, jerk off exuberantly, take his leak in the bathroom, discuss the data with Shelley after she had one or more rapturous orgasms and Ray had shot his wad at an undisclosed location, and then go off for a wild and sexy weekend with Brenda. You'll have to read the story to see Malinov's ending. I still liked mine better; and if Shania ever uses this for a song, she'll have to add either a bus station or a damned ole rodeo. Ratings for "The Trap Door" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 |