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"Love at First Sight" by Tom (love story) 5, 6, 5
"Love at First Sight" by Tom (tje@mail.nls.net). Reviewed by James. This is as close to Perfect as I have ever read. Which makes things seem, but only in retrospect, predictable. You see, this is a story with symmetry. Mary and Jack live in a carefree world - world whose only blemish is the crude fragrance of lilac bushes beside Jack's driveway. They are made for each other. She is as innocent as he is experienced. There is no evil or ugliness, only love and beauty - and the Perfect ending. For all this Perfection there were times when I got drawn in. I could imagine Mary's angelic figure -the awe of Jack as he realized he had found the one he would give everything up for. In this story, anyone who has been in love will find empathy. Whilst I liked this story - with its interesting, mild, interludes with Jack and Marsha, and, Jack and the English school teacher - it was not without some unwelcome distractions. For instance, I did not need to be told over and over again that "They were the same height". Some of the paragraphs are also way too large - making the story feel too long (even though it takes less than 20 minutes to read). To conclude, this story might feature some sex, but first and foremost it is a love story. And, at the end of the day, not one I feel inclined to recommend. Ratings for "Love at First Sight" Athena (technical quality): 5 Venus (plot & character): 6 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 5 |