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"Michele" by Stephen Peters (kiddysex) 9.5, 7, 0
"Michele" by Stephen Peters (Sxjames@aol.com). Guest review by Anne747 (Anon747@aol.com). One of my biggest flaws (well one of them at least) is that when I don't want to do something I can be the world's worst procrastinator. I really didn't want to review this story. Oh, I could have sent it back to Celeste, but I try not to do that very often, since having her pre- read them would defeat the purpose of guest reviewers. And actually, even if she had read it, she might figure it would slip under my `ick' radar (if there is such a thing). Okay, quick review, then my semi-rant. John, a 34-year old architect with a masters in civil engineering, has an affair with his 15-year old neighbor. That's really the whole story. It is written as a `true story' with a disclaimer at the end about it being fictional (although something the author wouldn't mind doing from his comments). So that's it - you like reading about grown men fucking little girls - you'll love it. It's reasonably well written, although a spell check would have picked up a couple of errors. Now, here are my problems with the story. First, I can't figure out why, but the author has a phone number for a voice mail system at the end. I can't help but wonder if he hopes an impressionable 15-year old will read the story and call him. God, I hope not. Second, the author tries to make John the victim of the story. Poor John, seduced into fucking the poor teenager. See, Michele is from a soon to be broken home. She's running away from a fight at home the first time they meet. He invites her in and befriends her. Along the line he realizes he's attracted to her, but fights it. Of course, when Michele arrives at the door, all wet and upset that her father has called her a whore, John succumbs to her plea for him to screw her. Yes, that's just what a confused child from a bad home life needs - sex. I don't know, the whole thing just turned my stomach. Of course the author even goes to the extent of letting you know how emotionally hurt he was by the whole thing, and the moral struggle he went through before deciding to fuck the young girl. Oh, and she tells him not to feel guilty, because she really wanted him to fuck her. Such a nice touch (ick). Ratings for "Michele" Athena (technical quality): 9.5 Venus (plot & character): 7 (probably higher if you buy into the motivation) Anne747 (appeal to reviewer): 0 (yep, disliked it that much) |