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"Fighting Rose's Corner" by Nick (Celestial sequel) 10, 8, 8
"Fighting Rose's Corner" by Nick (Nick@cassandra.demon.co.uk). This is a follow-up to my story entitled "The Review," which was originally posted in CR 250 as part of my review of DG's "Call of Desire" (which was also rated the Number 5 story of January 1998). In order to make really good sense out of the present story, you really ought to read my story first, which is archived at In my story, the fictional Celeste (c'est moi) was trying to write a review, but my husband came on to me and distracted me from my writing task. After I am thoroughly aroused, the phone rings, and my husband decides to increase our enjoyment by banging away at me even more industriously. The climax, so to speak, comes when he fucks me in the ass while I continue to converse on the phone with a rather prudish woman, who presumably knows not what is going on. The present story continues from the perspective of the other woman (Rose) after she has hung up the phone. I won't try to summarize the details. My overall reaction was that I was flattered that someone would enjoy my story enough to try writing a follow-up. However, my feeling is that this sequel is far too introspective. It's dangerous to praise one's own stories; but one of the best features of my story was that it conveyed most of the sexy idea through action. This sequel goes into Rose's background and her innermost thoughts - but there is no real action. I personally still enjoyed the story very much; but I think a reader without a vested interest would prefer that the author show us what Rose has done rather than just summarizing her sexual background. And so I am going to propose a contest. Maybe not a contest - perhaps I should call it an invitation. The challenge is to write Chapter 2 of "The Review." Follow it up in some creative manner. One possibility would be to try again from Rose's perspective, but that is not the only option. You can do anything you want, but you should try to be consistent with my original story. I think this could be fun. Note that SueNH and some co-authors have done something similar in the withSue stories. For example, her Catty Corner became Across the Catty Corner in cooperation with Backrub. Likewise, Mat Twassel wrote a sequel from a different perspective to Mark Aster's "Rain". TEX did this in an almost opposite way in "Raped Teen Burglar." I'm sure there are other examples. In fact, if you feel an urge to expand upon someone else's story, go ahead and try. My advice is that you cite the other story accurately in your disclaimer and that you seek the cooperation and approval of the person whose story you are expanding. I won't put a time limit on this. If you're interested, give it a try. And if you know of other sequel-stories that I have missed, let me know, and I'll try to post a complete list. Ratings for "Fighting Rose's Corner" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 8 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 8 |