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"Mrs. Michaels" by Grimace (intergenerational sex) 7, 5, 5
"Mrs. Michaels" by Grimace (Grimace1@erols.com). Mrs. Michaels, the mother of Dennis's best friend, broke up with her husband a couple of years ago. Dennis is now college age and has stopped by to ask if there is any work he can do for her around the house. She replies that there are a few things that have gone neglected since her husband left. Where do you think this story is going This story is pretty much the formula stuff for a "young guy fucks sexy older neighbor." Then at the end we discover that Mrs. Michaels has an even more sexy roommate. Dennis ogles her for a while, and then the story ends. Why? The story has lots of punctuation problems, and Mrs. Michaels has aureoles where we would expect areolae. Dennis is also concerned from the tall tales that other guys have told him that excessive sex might result in irreparable damage and mental "scaring." Aside from a better proofreading, the story also needs some fresh insights or something to perk it up. Ratings for "Mrs. Michaels" Athena (technical quality): 7 Venus (plot & character): 5 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 5 |